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Very good work.
I'll try to find some crit - what's your desired focal point? Right now my eye is drawn to the area of light under the center robot and the odd house shaped box under him. Not exactly sure how that's supposed to read, but with maybe more rendering of the ground texture (right now i can see the custom brush edges, maybe a fade out could help) or a clear cast shadow under him it could 'ground' the image more. hope that helps!
-The only thing I would suggest is clean up and put a bit more time into the hanging robot, maybe add more lighting to it. Judging from the light on the round it has a very distinct light source above it. The robot to the left could probably have a bit more shine to balance it out too.
-The hanging robots leg could be slighter smaller, and it's right upper arm could be longer with a slightly shorter fore-arm.
-Smoke is brighter in a light source too, if you wanted you could actually add some lighting to it where it comes out from under the tent.
-I also agree with what someone said about the mans head, it could be less of a side profile.
Hmm actually, rather than just suggest things; [link]
red lines are just unbalanced points and tangents, It's hard to avoid tangents. I wasn't sure what to do with the pipe cord tangent, I think it's fine where you have it.
Constructively, I'd point out that you need to work on perspective proportions. Also, the foreground is too sharp of a contrast from the background. Especially the metal in comparison to the earthy walls.
The human with the mechanical arm looks awesome, but the angle is a little confusing, I can't tell if he's looking AT the robot hanging, or just in the general direction.
The robot itself also looks really cool, but the leg... something about it looks wrong. I can't quite put my finger on it.
It's not a bad thing, but your composition is a little odd too. It's very very cluttered to the left, and my eyes want to gravitate there. Honestly, I'm drawn to the door way more than anything. Maybe a different angle, or just shifted over, or something more on the right to balance it out.
Again, even past that, this is a great piece. I really like it a lot, it's got a lot of detail in it, and you've got great technique. Keep it up.